tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post3269914724222144299..comments2014-07-25T21:56:58.331-07:00Comments on English 310: Advanced Writing Blog: 2nd Post for Jan 26Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-12710375822164102752011-02-01T23:30:58.597-08:002011-02-01T23:30:58.597-08:00Javier,
I thought your hook was very original and ...Javier,<br />I thought your hook was very original and I liked it.<br />Lauri S.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-34925519906493053312011-01-31T01:32:53.067-08:002011-01-31T01:32:53.067-08:00Thalia's and Stephanie Pickens's hooks bot...Thalia's and Stephanie Pickens's hooks both grabbed my attention excellently!<br /><br />-Bryce RankinsAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-6338603314103721382011-01-31T01:07:30.655-08:002011-01-31T01:07:30.655-08:00Thalia.. Your introduction had me hooked right fro...Thalia.. Your introduction had me hooked right from the beginning. I became emotionally attached to the story as soon as I started reading it. I also like your song choice because it is similar to mine as well. –Nicole LackeyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-87909942550980552882011-01-28T10:09:36.525-08:002011-01-28T10:09:36.525-08:00Amber Gilliam
Cristina your Intro is great. The e...Amber Gilliam<br /><br />Cristina your Intro is great. The entire thing is well thought out and composed. Awesome job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-32144634658000713082011-01-27T23:12:20.452-08:002011-01-27T23:12:20.452-08:00Sandra Garcia
Regina I really liked your hook. It...Sandra Garcia<br /><br />Regina I really liked your hook. It caught my attention and made me want to read the rest of your introduction.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-12603951773344134442011-01-27T15:29:25.743-08:002011-01-27T15:29:25.743-08:00I really like your introduction Rogelio. You also ...I really like your introduction Rogelio. You also have a great thesis.<br />Nice job! <br /><br /><br />BaleriaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-91234846773440885792011-01-27T11:45:42.619-08:002011-01-27T11:45:42.619-08:00Calie
Marciela,
I like the way you hook people wi...Calie<br /><br />Marciela,<br />I like the way you hook people with your introduction and I also like that you chose a love song.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-53135617392918972592011-01-27T11:05:26.765-08:002011-01-27T11:05:26.765-08:00Marco I really like your introduction. Your hook c...Marco I really like your introduction. Your hook connects perfectly with the rest of the paragraph.<br />Great job!<br />-Cristina ElizondoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-74470751731651966042011-01-27T11:00:39.473-08:002011-01-27T11:00:39.473-08:00Sandra Garcia,
I love your hook. I think that is ...Sandra Garcia, <br />I love your hook. I think that is so creative and pensive.<br /><br />PattyPatricianoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-42516429411016115302011-01-26T21:18:51.229-08:002011-01-26T21:18:51.229-08:00Hi Chika,
I really like the fact that your essay h...Hi Chika,<br />I really like the fact that your essay has an easy flow; all the sentences are well connected. I especially liked your hook because it’s something that we can all relate to. - ZullyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-11035706970032092602011-01-26T19:40:43.335-08:002011-01-26T19:40:43.335-08:00Javier Calderon said...
Maria Gonzales, your intr...Javier Calderon said...<br /><br />Maria Gonzales, your introduction was very interesting and your hook sentence works perfectly. Good job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-57482469118203051052011-01-26T18:43:17.820-08:002011-01-26T18:43:17.820-08:00Maricela I.
Ashley C., I like your thesis. It gra...Maricela I.<br /><br />Ashley C., I like your thesis. It grabbed my attention.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-39854273500888471462011-01-26T18:27:20.797-08:002011-01-26T18:27:20.797-08:00Rogelio Alvarado
Hello Baleria, I really liked you...Rogelio Alvarado<br />Hello Baleria, I really liked your hook sentence with the question. It makes me stop and wonder the importance of a relationship.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-69536364366366075312011-01-26T16:58:48.927-08:002011-01-26T16:58:48.927-08:00Serena,
I like your hook! Everyone likes to read ...Serena,<br /><br />I like your hook! Everyone likes to read when they see, "passion and love" anywhere. We are all looking for it and your into stood out to me because of that. <br /><br />Diala NimriDiala Nimrinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-44838370786116056762011-01-26T15:22:55.382-08:002011-01-26T15:22:55.382-08:00Ashley Corvera
Marciela, your introduction is goo...Ashley Corvera<br /><br />Marciela, your introduction is good. I love love songs :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-53115461138739376872011-01-26T14:03:32.589-08:002011-01-26T14:03:32.589-08:00Rosa Mendoza
Melissa Sherman,I liked the hook tha...Rosa Mendoza<br /><br />Melissa Sherman,I liked the hook that you picked for your essay. This hook is great, and it makes me want to read your essay. This hook also makes me wonder what your essay is going to be about. The way that you ended the hook gives me a feeling of suspense, and that was one of the things that got my attention.<br />Great job!!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-32336696262965890392011-01-26T13:30:35.020-08:002011-01-26T13:30:35.020-08:00Chika Nwanonenyi
Francisco what a wonderful hook...Chika Nwanonenyi<br /><br /><br />Francisco what a wonderful hook and use of simile.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-78859120875212220772011-01-26T12:16:31.295-08:002011-01-26T12:16:31.295-08:00Francisco Hernandez
Wow Javier Calderon, great ho...Francisco Hernandez<br /><br />Wow Javier Calderon, great hook.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-81502539262262002082011-01-26T12:12:52.261-08:002011-01-26T12:12:52.261-08:00Stephanie Pickens
Ashly Anfield I liked your hook...Stephanie Pickens<br /><br />Ashly Anfield I liked your hook. I wanted to read the rest of your intro beacause of it. Liked the intro great work!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-85601275989112170702011-01-26T12:12:43.549-08:002011-01-26T12:12:43.549-08:00Gonzalo Heredia
Hey Melissa, i love you Hook. It...Gonzalo Heredia<br /><br />Hey Melissa, i love you Hook. It was a very good way to get the attention of the reader.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-27449938376345168152011-01-26T12:11:37.378-08:002011-01-26T12:11:37.378-08:00Hilda Nieblas
Sandra Garcia I really like how you...Hilda Nieblas<br /><br />Sandra Garcia I really like how you used a childhood story as your hock.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-702401302953913552011-01-26T12:10:55.786-08:002011-01-26T12:10:55.786-08:00Hey Melissa, I really like your Hook. It is engagi...Hey Melissa, I really like your Hook. It is engaging and leaves the reader interested in reading more!Regina Gottwaldnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-60931626321642730382011-01-26T12:10:54.014-08:002011-01-26T12:10:54.014-08:00hey Gonzalo,
I like how you started your intro wit...hey Gonzalo,<br />I like how you started your intro with questions making the reader think ahead before the start reading.<br />Maria GonzalezAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-19369089452324897072011-01-26T12:10:04.285-08:002011-01-26T12:10:04.285-08:00Melissa Sherman
Hey, Stephanie and Ariana, I love...Melissa Sherman<br /><br />Hey, Stephanie and Ariana, I love both of your hooks! Good job girls, keep up the good work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1516317854732032449.post-39470270600709257662011-01-26T12:10:02.649-08:002011-01-26T12:10:02.649-08:00Hello Sandra Garcia,
You're hook is really go...Hello Sandra Garcia,<br /><br />You're hook is really good! <br /><br />-Marco AguinigaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com